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« on: January 20, 2010, 11:52:56 AM » |
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New to this board and unfamilliar with certain procedures, may I invite anyone to read this partial chapter on plant akaloids and psychoactive drugs. This is to be but one chapter in a book of general trivia and it is only 2/3 complete. It can be found in my web space at the following link: http://www.members.toast.net/bulfrog4/dir2/Crazy Plants.docIn MS Word format to preserve the pictures. Any constructive criticism would be welcome... |
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« Reply #1 on: January 22, 2010, 07:23:40 PM » |
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Fine: No response, no encouragement, no criticism, no hiccups, no farts, no soap, no cussing, no comments, no compliments. Very well. Here is a different chapter. 3507 words... http://www/members.toast.net/bulfrog4/dir2/Metric.doc |
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"Imagination is more important than knowledge" - sign hanging in Einstein's office @ Princeton
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« Reply #2 on: January 23, 2010, 12:08:37 AM » |
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hold your horses mister. i am going to take a look at this. |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Sana
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« Reply #3 on: January 23, 2010, 12:44:09 AM » |
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so I got half-way through the 'Crazy Plants' text, the writing seeems good, I don't see any weird inconsistencies or major grammatical fiascos. I am not sure what you are exactly looking for in terms of a critique, but since the nature of the text is...academic/scientific and/or educational, I guess you're doing fine! |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Nick
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« Reply #4 on: January 23, 2010, 03:03:58 AM » |
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Sana, Melissa isn't a mister. Melissa, are you the BFA from... well, let's simplify this- Lotsa 'Melissa Harshman' come at me from google. Which are you? I ask because after going through your first plant installment I am looking to get where you are coming from. About your piece; thorough enough. Being born into this form 1952 I knew most of this stuff. Why call it "Crazy" Plants? They are plants. Crazy/not crazy are homo sapien characterizations of various, by one light, chemical combinations in, primarily, homo sapiens. Full marks for good spelling, by the way. Later, Nick |
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A story derives from the writer's perceptive observation and careful report of scene and from structural discipline.
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Nick
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« Reply #5 on: January 23, 2010, 07:34:18 AM » |
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Ooops, my apoligies, Mr. Frog. Went to profile page and see that you are male in gender. Guess your intent on posting at Mary is you are writing a book and want some opinions on it. I got a 5 minute attention span (on a good day) and am of almost no help. Still looks like good spelling to me though. Yeah, Sana- I still make mistakes. Good thing I'm polite, huh? |
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A story derives from the writer's perceptive observation and careful report of scene and from structural discipline.
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Nick
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« Reply #6 on: January 23, 2010, 07:39:21 AM » |
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Oh, and my query of why the plants are being labeled crazy stands. Wonder if I used 'query' properly. He's a smart guy, he'll figure it out. Besides, in 4 and a half minutes you will be thinkin' of something else. Yeah, you're right. Hey thanks. It's my pleasure, bean fry. |
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A story derives from the writer's perceptive observation and careful report of scene and from structural discipline.
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Sana
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« Reply #7 on: January 23, 2010, 05:13:37 PM » |
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It's okay, Nick. I went ahead to check the profile when you mentioned that! |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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« Reply #8 on: January 23, 2010, 05:31:14 PM » |
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Fine:
No response, no encouragement, no criticism, no hiccups, no farts, no soap, no cussing, no comments, no compliments.
Very well. . . How many critiques have you posted on the works of others? |
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"The castigation of fools is, of course, an ancient and honorable task of writers and, unless very poorly done, an enterprise that will usually entertain those who behold it." ~ Richard Mitchell |
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bulfrog4
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« Reply #9 on: January 24, 2010, 01:15:29 PM » |
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Sana Rafig says "I am not sure what you are exactly looking for in terms of a critique" and Nick mentions a 5-minute attention span. --> My intention is to pass information without loosing the reader to boredom. Don't want this chapter to have the feel of a dry textbook, but apparently it does. It's probably an issue of injecting more numerous and entertaining footnotes than of reducing the vocabulary to a more sophomoric level? "Crazy Plants" because the ones that can really make people crazy (the psychedelics) haven't been discussed yet. [locoweed, belladonna, mandrake, curare, hemlock, jimsonweed, psilocybin, peyote, LSD-from ergot]. The stimulant and depressant psychoactives needed to be covered and put to rest- first.
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« Reply #10 on: January 24, 2010, 04:09:30 PM » |
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--> My intention is to pass information without loosing the reader to boredom. Don't want this chapter to have the feel of a dry textbook, but apparently it does. It's probably an issue of injecting more numerous and entertaining footnotes than of reducing the vocabulary to a more sophomoric level?
"Crazy Plants" because the ones that can really make people crazy (the psychedelics) haven't been discussed yet. [locoweed, belladonna, mandrake, curare, hemlock, jimsonweed, psilocybin, peyote, LSD-from ergot]. The stimulant and depressant psychoactives needed to be covered and put to rest- first.
Well actually your writing was pretty engaging and I liked the tone, so I believe you managed to turn an educational topic into an entertaining read. I was short on time, or I'd have read more. |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Nick
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« Reply #11 on: January 24, 2010, 05:42:47 PM » |
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--> My intention is to pass information without loosing the reader to boredom.
"...loosing the reader..."? You meant 'losing the reader', right? |
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A story derives from the writer's perceptive observation and careful report of scene and from structural discipline.
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« Reply #12 on: January 24, 2010, 05:47:30 PM » |
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he could be implying 'loosing' as in lost - or 'loosening' the reader ~!! eh we do have uptight readers don't we. |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Nick
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« Reply #13 on: January 24, 2010, 05:50:14 PM » |
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Man, I simply do not have the hang of this quote function. Keep givin' it a go, Nick- you'll tumble the trick of it soon enough. 'Sides, ain't no one keepin' score. |
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A story derives from the writer's perceptive observation and careful report of scene and from structural discipline.
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Nick
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« Reply #14 on: January 24, 2010, 05:54:48 PM » |
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Few more days and I say we have this guy spewin' spaghetti through his nose. I just know he's got a sense of humour or my name ain't whatever y'all wanna call me. |
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