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LiteraryMaryWriting and Random Creativity Workshops Fiction, Flash Fiction and ProseHoles (1,230 words)
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« on: June 01, 2010, 05:16:43 PM »

editing and what not.
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Short stories posted Mon, Wed and Fri.
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« Reply #1 on: September 29, 2010, 11:06:19 PM »

Ooo! I like this.   Very atmospheric.   One of those "descent into madness" stories.  The only critical thing I can say is to watch your placement of commas, as some of them are incorrect and break the sentence at the wrong point.
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« Reply #2 on: October 31, 2010, 11:21:07 PM »

I enjoyed it.
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