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« on: January 09, 2010, 12:24:54 PM »


On Considering Buddha Whilst Pissing

Buddha, decapitated and neatly mantled
peers frozenly at my navel.

Two years to notice the absurdity
of which she likes to call decor.

Take Christ, who with open arms
is nailed upon a canvas and hung above our bed.

Or what of Elvis, face smeared with grease-
spat bacon fat. He appears happy posing

at the photo clad fridge. Even death has
its place on the shelf, door-stopping the books

each new year’s eve a single cigarette and
a thimbleful of red wine we leave-

and come morning, untouched we acknowledge
absence, discarding it with dry tears.

Yet Che remains exiled in the dark lands of
the attic, considered irrelevant by my love-

Yet Buddha remains, observing the path of my piss.
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« Reply #1 on: January 09, 2010, 12:53:57 PM »

There's something rustic and effective about this. It seems to be a spawn of spontaneous brainstormage paired with thoughtful scrutinization on any particular day of the world's rotating workshift. I like it, but not sure who Mackuly is.
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« Reply #2 on: January 11, 2010, 08:58:19 AM »

You got something hung above your bed, what's hung above hers?
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« Reply #3 on: January 11, 2010, 09:03:14 AM »

Despite sleeping on the sofa app 3 times a week due to not been able to be woken once the whiskey has shut the eyes and mind, i do, thankfull still share the bed with her, which has now been amended and instead of me i have unselfishly replaced it with OUR

many thanks

Nick, hows you???
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« Reply #4 on: January 11, 2010, 09:30:23 AM »

I'm good. Wrote my '73 USN entry experience yesterday morning. Put it up last night in the Essay and Nonfiction section. Is it 'accessible'?
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« Reply #5 on: January 28, 2010, 12:53:09 PM »

I love this one!
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« Reply #6 on: January 30, 2010, 10:18:36 PM »

oh.. this is brilliant! i love it. i think the language really got me as well as the way the stanzas are set up--how they spill into each other. wonderful. and it does have a rustic quality to it, as someone mentioned.

great job.
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« Reply #7 on: February 01, 2010, 08:57:19 AM »

This is good Vincent. I'm short on words today, but this flowed well and threw in a few images that worked for me

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Or what of Elvis, face smeared with grease-
spat bacon fat. He appears happy posing

at the photo clad fridge
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