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I regurgitate knives into a pillow to deny them their rightful place in mutinous flesh. |
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« Reply #1 on: February 04, 2010, 10:38:43 AM » |
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I regurgitate knives
into a pillow
to deny them
their rightful place
in mutinous flesh. Who not? I regurgitate knives into my pillow to deny them their place in my chest. call it From my lover. Just a thought. Interesting image. |
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Do not confuse ingenuous with ingenious - Olaf
Dedicated to bad writing - Charles Bukowski
'A man of genius makes no mistakes. His errors are volitional and are the portals of discovery.' - James Joyce
The man that cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot -Andre Breton
Who has the courage to go into the dark places where there is nothing but feeling? - Thomas A. Clark
'For everything that is hidden will eventually be brought into the open and every secret should be brought to the light. Anyone with ears to hear should listen and understand.' - Mark 4:22-23
Many a clever boy is flogged into a dunce and many an original composition corrected into mediocrity- Sir Walter Scott
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Sana
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« Reply #2 on: February 05, 2010, 12:54:31 AM » |
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I loved both the versions  |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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redperil
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« Reply #3 on: February 05, 2010, 08:27:39 AM » |
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POW! A clever little piece. Works for me. However, because I'm bored, I'm going to throw something at you... I spit knives into pillow denying their prick to mutinous flesh. |
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Thinking.
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« Reply #4 on: February 05, 2010, 09:58:59 AM » |
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Very nice, all of them!!! it appears a little trend has started here... am i brave enough to offer mine? regards Vincent |
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“Human misery must somewhere have a stop; there is no wind that always blows a storm”.
Euripides
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Sana
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« Reply #5 on: February 05, 2010, 06:16:35 PM » |
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sure, why not, let me have a go at it: I watch my knives cut deep into white-assed potatoes before they are thrown into the boiling waters to unleash their unmitigated essence. |
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« Last Edit: February 05, 2010, 06:18:46 PM by Sana Rafiq »
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Olaf
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« Reply #6 on: February 06, 2010, 09:18:18 AM » |
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That's a funny image.  I can imagine a pair of butt cheeks, not seen the sun in years, (probably Scottish), jumping into a swimming pool in summer, or, to peeled and washed potatoes, being flung into a boil pot of water. Slap that ass,  |
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Do not confuse ingenuous with ingenious - Olaf
Dedicated to bad writing - Charles Bukowski
'A man of genius makes no mistakes. His errors are volitional and are the portals of discovery.' - James Joyce
The man that cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot -Andre Breton
Who has the courage to go into the dark places where there is nothing but feeling? - Thomas A. Clark
'For everything that is hidden will eventually be brought into the open and every secret should be brought to the light. Anyone with ears to hear should listen and understand.' - Mark 4:22-23
Many a clever boy is flogged into a dunce and many an original composition corrected into mediocrity- Sir Walter Scott
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« Reply #7 on: February 06, 2010, 04:27:39 PM » |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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« Reply #8 on: February 07, 2010, 04:15:59 PM » |
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I'm loving all these revisions! Allow me to throw one in there: "Exodus" I regurgitate knives into a pillow to deny their place in mutinous flesh. Keep 'em coming, I'm having fun reading these! |
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« Reply #9 on: February 08, 2010, 10:23:13 PM » |
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"exodus" regurgitated denying mutinous flesh to pillow my knives 020810
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« Reply #10 on: February 10, 2010, 01:58:27 PM » |
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i enjoyed all of these variations, but cannot come up with one of my own, unfortunately. |
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