Confused by its simplicity, I watch the rabbit in my yard.
Wishing life was that easy
This is by far the best thing I have read of your work here at LM
It offers me a visual I can relate too, and does not bring just your emotion into the poem, it brings everyone's. We can all relate to looking at nature- animals and envying their apparent simple ways.
The rest of the poem is not for me- for reasons I have pointed out before.
It would not be harmful to bin the poem but keep the above mentioned lines- Sometimes I have to write twenty poems to get just one strong line that I would be truly happy to keep. You have one here. Build on that, it has plenty of promise.
Best Regards
Vincent
