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« on: April 18, 2011, 06:45:12 PM » |
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His bones twice the vastness his chest a bone yard plucking each with my finger print tips next his beard growing pepper brush bristles his voice I can’t touch crystal- lined by his life cookie cut by our love amber bone box resin made mettle by us. |
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Sana
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« Reply #1 on: April 18, 2011, 08:19:28 PM » |
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oo I like it! And good to read you again! |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Jenifer
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« Reply #2 on: April 20, 2011, 10:24:47 AM » |
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Thanks, Sana. I've been writing a little more lately, and then I had to grade a stack of papers right in the middle... |
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VickieSALT
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« Reply #3 on: April 23, 2011, 03:40:30 PM » |
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no punctuation leaves me to feel a different world than what you are probably illustrating...one of the most realistic things you make me feel is the reality - of having sex with a bearded man. Puzzling? Unexpected?  |
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Jenifer
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« Reply #4 on: April 28, 2011, 10:04:05 PM » |
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Vicki you make me smile. I didn't want to punctuate this one, just because. Do you ever get one of those feelings? That you do or don't want to do something just because? |
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VickieSALT
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« Reply #5 on: May 01, 2011, 10:14:33 AM » |
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well, the bearded thing has something to do with just because. You smiled - when I laughed - because when I saw a naked bearded man for the first time in my life, I laughed - maybe just because - but when sex moment was just not hot, he asked why I was laughing, and I did not want to tell him that he looked like a naked Santa Clause. a victim of some cruel prank at a neighborhood mall. |
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Jenifer
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« Reply #6 on: May 03, 2011, 12:02:34 AM » |
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Laughing out loud again. It's not a Santa Claus beard! Just some stubble. You know, like George Clooney? |
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VickieSALT
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« Reply #7 on: May 03, 2011, 06:49:00 AM » |
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He is not exactly my type, though his stubble is cute. For me - a man's facial hair means inner thighs rubbed a bit raw. Maybe it's the phase I am this part of the month. Into girls, with cravings for Mandingo stuff in the back of my mind. Totally wicked - hope to keep it all literary, to take it easy on my husband. So - please, post some more of your visions of men and their quirks. Yummy, I want some goosebumps.  Mwuah! |
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Olaf
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« Reply #8 on: May 08, 2011, 11:10:16 AM » |
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I'm not sure about this Jen. It is too minimalist without the precision needed to make a complete picture. I'm left a bit empty. Searching for detials. Hungry for more images. For something. |
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Do not confuse ingenuous with ingenious - Olaf
Dedicated to bad writing - Charles Bukowski
'A man of genius makes no mistakes. His errors are volitional and are the portals of discovery.' - James Joyce
The man that cannot visualize a horse galloping on a tomato is an idiot -Andre Breton
Who has the courage to go into the dark places where there is nothing but feeling? - Thomas A. Clark
'For everything that is hidden will eventually be brought into the open and every secret should be brought to the light. Anyone with ears to hear should listen and understand.' - Mark 4:22-23
Many a clever boy is flogged into a dunce and many an original composition corrected into mediocrity- Sir Walter Scott
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Jenifer
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« Reply #9 on: May 09, 2011, 09:15:46 PM » |
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Thanks for the honesty, Colin. I'll have another go at it soon. I'm hoping to have more time to write after graduation. I'm excited about that. |
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