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[danny fahey]

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The Master of Forget

So now I think
have I forgotten
certain events in my childhood

Did you manage
to infiltrate

Is that why I fled

My sister called today
spoke of your touch
and how she drank herself into 3 early pregnancies
how it’s only through them
she found herself again

and I had this thought that you
who had seemed my friend
was after more than I ever guessed


and I am damned if recollections
let me know if you
found success with me


and if I
am the master of the forget

[Father Luke]

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How would it look if you omitted all punctuation except for capitalization

[danny fahey]

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Ta Father Luke and yes I do like the look of that idea.

[Jenifer]

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Jesus this is really good.

Father Luke and I had a sort of discussion on unpunctuated pieces.  I think that some people can pull it off and others can't.

This works nicely without it.

[Vincent Turner]

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Hi Danny

another strong poem, that tests and shocks the reader

this series of poems dealing with your recent heartbreak is very well handled, it avoids the sentimental, and as i mentioned on another of your posts covering the same topic the poem does not push the reader away.

I hope the proccess of writing these poems is helping you make sense of the madness and the wrong.

Keep well.

Best Regards

Vincent