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« on: January 28, 2010, 03:23:36 PM » |
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My voice. I have a voice? Can you hear it in these lines? Is it charged? Does it resonate with reason or dread? Or does it nail me down parochial colloquy some small town crier. Trying to bump start some writing again..... went through my Incubator file and found this. Any thoughts? |
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"How vain it is to sit down to write when you have not stood up to live"- H.D. Thoreau
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Father Luke
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« Reply #1 on: January 28, 2010, 03:42:00 PM » |
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Corndog: Writing is something which happens in waves, I think. The waves go out - the waves come back in. Each coming wave brings with it something from where it came, and each receding wave takes with it something from where it's been. So, naturally the voice are the things it gathers -- the maturity of the writer. As to the particular piece... meh. What would be your honest assessment? I'd be curious to know your own thoughts. |
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"The castigation of fools is, of course, an ancient and honorable task of writers and, unless very poorly done, an enterprise that will usually entertain those who behold it." ~ Richard Mitchell |
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Corndog
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« Reply #2 on: January 28, 2010, 03:59:58 PM » |
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I think its shit! But a starting point maybe? Mary's back me thinks? |
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"How vain it is to sit down to write when you have not stood up to live"- H.D. Thoreau
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Vincent Turner
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« Reply #3 on: January 28, 2010, 04:07:49 PM » |
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i imagine you have thrown a stone into a lake, this poem is the first small ripple, following this will come bigger ripples, expanding all the time. This is not shit, merely a way of getting back in there. its good to see you posting again, its been some time. of the three short stanza the strongest, for me, is the third one, the first is a little lazy, no, obvious, the second for me is weak cliched and redundant, then the third, much better. I know how it feels to be out of the game for some time, its hard, you are desperate to get back into the swing of things, Theo Walcot springs to me ( you like football, i hope so, or this will be lost on you!!!) anyhow good to see you around best regards Vincent |
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“Human misery must somewhere have a stop; there is no wind that always blows a storm”.
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Father Luke
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« Reply #4 on: January 28, 2010, 10:24:09 PM » |
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Natalie Goldberg has this great analogy about starting to write. I'll paraphrase it: "It's like finding a water spigot along the side of the house you'd forgotten about.
You turn the faucet, and the pipes sputter, and shake. Rusty water shoots out, and
you just let it flow.
Pretty soon the water runs clear, and true each time you turn on the handle..."So it's shit. You say that like it's a bad thing.  |
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Jenifer
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« Reply #5 on: January 29, 2010, 03:34:07 PM » |
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I agree with Father Luke. It's not a bad thing. You want it, so make it happen. I'm actually going through the same thing... very rusty. Maybe together we will find it again? Yes, Mary is back. Jen |
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Sana
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« Reply #6 on: January 29, 2010, 03:51:24 PM » |
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Hi Roger, good to see you around. I am just glad Mary is active and kicking again we all need practice to get back in groove. Look forward to reading you some, Sana |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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Father Luke
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« Reply #7 on: January 29, 2010, 07:42:18 PM » |
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Mary is an old crack whore with shards for teeth. But Facebook is wanting, and myspace is sputtering. Mary has always been here... waiting... waiting... always. |
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Sana
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« Reply #8 on: January 29, 2010, 08:13:49 PM » |
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Would it have been worth while,
To have bitten off the matter with a smile,
To have squeezed the universe into a ball
To roll it toward some overwhelming question
To say: "I am Lazarus, come from the dead,
Come back to tell you all, I shall tell you all"
T.S. Eliot
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