Staring through the window
into the yard, where the cat yowls,
and the only sounds in the room
are refrigerator hum and tap drip.
I deleted the other staring too.
There seems to be conflict between the cat's yowl and the only sounds in the room. Maybe cat got be in the kitchen yowling just once as it curl's around your leg? You might not even need to mention 'the only sounds in the room' just mention the isolated sounds.
The remnants of a just smoked cigarette
linger in the air- already stale.
'Remnants' is bit lofty. Why not 'butt' or 'dout' - dout is the one for me - more suggestive. And not sure aboutthat 'already stale' hanging on at the end. The logic of these lines could be re-worked.
'Hanging in the air the stale smell
of a just stubbed cigarette dout.'
Unmoving.
I am still as the silent cricket
in the company of my reflection:
staring it down, as if to say,
who do you think you are.
Stronger word than 'unmoving'? 'silent cricket' is OK but could you be as silent as something else, more unusual, more suggestive? I like the staring down as yourself but maybe instead of 'who do you think you are' the more appropriate question to ask what be 'What are you going to do?' or 'What are you avoiding?' - could word it differently but something like that.
The scene is a common one. That idle moment of quiet. When noone is around. Almost meditative. We have found a secret moment of private. I imagine this is early in the morning, perhaps you woke up too early like 6 in the morning and are having a quiet moment of peace.
Title is fine!
Simple idea but tighten it so that it is worth the read.
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